: Re: How to write a vulnerable moment without it seeming cliche or mushy? So, I have a kinda loudmouthed character who's always the first to fight and first to go on the offensive (This is a fantasy,

I think it depends on the build up whether it seems fake. The character shouldn't just jump to tears. They should go through the whole grief cycle. This should happen even maybe in the span of a single conversation to show how upset she is.

She should seem put off but hopeful she can change it or something isn't real. Then she should be stand offish but depressed as she comes to understand something isn't working out or isn't changing. Then she should be angry at the world or something in particular, potentially irrationally angry even at the person that eventually comforts her. How could he understand what she is going through?! Then finally she should break and the tears should flow. As the tears flow, despite being attacked, he pulls her close to his chest. He may not understand what she is angry about, but he understands her.

Have some build up showing this is brewing a bit before it suddenly unravels, or do each stage longer and over several days. Just depends on how you want this scene to exactly play out.

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: How do you "develop characters" using an event driven format? For instance, in my high school novel, I have the main characters attend a football game, the Homecoming Dance, the basketball game,

: What matters more when it comes to book covers? Is it â€˜professional qualityâ€™ or relevancy? This is a sort of follow up to my previous question. It is generally understood that covers matter

: Is it okay to have a sequel start immediately after the end of the first book? The sequel to my first book is supposed to start immediately after the end of the first book. Zero time gap.

: I don't understand the dilemma, just write it the way you want. Ultimately if you want a strong women that embraces her femininity, you are going to put her in a dress, have her pay attention

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