: Re: Is it okay to put an inversion in a song lyrics? In the dark alley of my youth, light, it shone from the cloud-ladden sky. I've been listening to the chirping in the trees.

@Cofer669

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I think the name for what you want to do is Hyperbaton

From a writing and English comprehension standpoint, I don't see a problem with it. The meaning of the sentence is perfectly clear, and unless you are working under some kind of constraint, there's really not much to stop you.

If you're worried about it being good, however, I would consider advice from an
old professor I had-

"All remarkable writing has form and function, and form always must always serve a function."

I can't say I completely agree, but it's something to consider. What is the purpose of this structure?

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