: Re: Is it okay to put an inversion in a song lyrics? In the dark alley of my youth, light, it shone from the cloud-ladden sky. I've been listening to the chirping in the trees.

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Reading it aloud like a monologue might sound a bit unnatural, but if it’s going to be put to music I would say it’s completely acceptable and even a good thing to split up a line it that way. It holds tension, yet feels satisfying when we understand what’s being said.
But, if you eventually find you don’t like it, there is an alternative.

In the dark alley of my youth,
light shone from the cloud-ladden sky.

When singing the lyrics, one would just skip a small amount of time before starting that line, to make up for the missing syllable where the word “it” would have been.
As for putting in three unrelated sentences in the same verse, I would say that’s completely fine, as long as they are related to the subject of the song they don’t necessarily need to line up with each other. But ultimately, do whatever feels right, because it is art.

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