: Re: Is it okay to put an inversion in a song lyrics? In the dark alley of my youth, light, it shone from the cloud-ladden sky. I've been listening to the chirping in the trees.

@Margaret427

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In terms of meaning, emotional impact, etc. how is:

In the dark alley of my youth,
light, it shone from the cloud-laden sky.

different from:

In the dark alley of my youth,
light shone from the cloud-laden sky.

?

If the unusual wording isn't there to affect the audience in some specific way, it simply looks like awkward writing.

The same words could be used like this though:

In the dark alley of my youth: light.
It shone from the cloud-laden sky.

It makes sense and doesn't feel awkward.

If it no longer scans well with your music, well, handling that is what composing and writing are all about.

How about:

In the dark alley of my youth,
a light shone from the cloud-laden sky.

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