: Re: Can somebody write this text in 3rd person omniscient Father didn't seem to hear me. I'd never seen him so upset. What he said about Mother was true, but I couldn't make myself resent the

I am sure that someone could do that for you. It will not be me. And I have reasons for that.

What you present in your question are the words. What is lacking is the writer's intent in writing those words. I assume that you have something to say and that you have come to this forum to fix problems with how you are saying it. There are many ways to re-write this material but only a few that would be true to that intent.

Here is what I would like to see in a question:

This is what I am trying to accomplish (theme, intent)
This is what I have tried (hopefully more than one thing)
This is the problem or deficiency as I see it (more than "it is wrong")
This is the criteria that I will use to judge the answer (more objective than subjective)

Please edit your question to provide the information that we need to answer it.

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