: How to time "big reveal" and twist moments? My question is similar to this one and in the same general vein as this one, but I think it's sufficiently different to warrant its own question.

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As JonStonecash noted, this depends on the kind of story you want to build.

I would consider that it is appropriate to reveal this at the beginning of the first chapter. I expect you wanted to write a story about an android detective, and you want your readers to know he is an android. This is the kind of thing that would be shown in the backcover: "Our android protagonist will need to find out..."

This would allow you to include a number of to the problems he faces by being an android:

On The Caves of Steel R. Daneel Olivaw had an id card without that 'problematic' R. initial (meaning "Robot") which would have restricted him e.g. in the public transport. Your society may be "racist", not allowing your robot to do certain things or ask certain questions. Or quite the opposite, by being an android, he could be able to sneak in certain places without being noticed as a "rational being".

He might want to access some important building, but visitors need to go through a metal detector (which he would trip, even bearing no arms). Or even some places could X-rays people to ensure only humans enter.

This is probably the case in casinos, where an android, with perfect memory, would have an important advantage on many card games.

In a different story, he could be personally involved when investigating a murder that was blamed to his creator / android factory. In which case he could end up sold at auction / destroyed.

While not so directly involved, a corrupt cybersecurity software company could be responsible for some faulty software that harmed an android friend. The company could be bribing some politicians, lobbying so that all androids must install in their "brains" certain software they make (which our protagonist is reluctant to do, as it doesn't trust them at all).

All of these would require the reader to be in-the-know (which other people with whom it interacts may be aware of or not).

The first chapter should pave the ground for the rest of the story, and thus it seems the perfect place to provide this important 'detail'.

Or you could make a story where it is a twist point that is revealed at the end of the story changing its perspective, such as

Robot Visions by Isaac Asimov

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The question is, how much of the story turns on the fact that the protagonist is an android. Perhaps, a human detective would not have thrived or even survived. Also, how important is his(?) identity in the legal, economic, social, and religious contexts.

From what you wrote, I could envision several different stories.

In one, the underlying story is that of "coming out" and the mystery is merely the way of showing (rather than telling) the story. An android would see the world differently from a human. The questions asked and the actions taken would be a "bit off" and would cause tension in the reader who would ask, why is he being so strange. In most mysteries, the reader will assume that the detective knows something that the reader does not. Ideally, the reveal would happen at the same time that the outer mystery is solved, and that solution would be tied to some specific capability possessed only by androids.

In a second, the mystery is the primary story and the fact that the detective is an android is one of several decorations on the wall that color the story. Perhaps, the android is less proficient in something that a human would handle without thinking. And perhaps, that prolongs the solution of the mystery. This would seem to call for an earlier reveal, most likely in the first few progressive complications of the story. In failure, the detective would lament his/her lack of true understanding of gender, eating, or social graces.

Which story (among these and many other possibilities) is the right one? Not a clue.

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You want the drama to build. And the bigger a reveal, the more dramatic it is, so they should be withheld for later.

However, there is the question of whether this is as big a reveal as this reader thinks. You mention that only one of the group said that. Did the others say nothing? You might explicitly ask them if you have doubts, but if only one of a group object to something, it may just be a mismatch between your story and the reader. No story appeals to everyone.

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