: Re: "This" vs "that" in past tense narrative Here are some examples (first person past tense): "Well, goodby then." After saying this/that, he picked up his hat and ran out door. I

I don't think there's any huge detriment story-wise (or even grammar-wise), but I would suggest "this" for the first and "that" for the second. However, I wouldn't phrase the first passage that way since it's a bit stilted and odd to read. You could sayâ€¦

"Well, goodbye then," he said as he picked up his hat and ran out the door.

â€¦or you could just sayâ€¦

"Well, goodbye then." He picked up his hat and ran out the door.

I'd have to see the context, but it should help the flow.

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