: Re: Omitting pronouns and possessive adjectives in fiction When is OK to omitting pronouns and possessive adjectives in fiction? Examples: She called me that weekend while I was cleaning my apartment.

I think in all three examples you're starting to impede comprehension, and change the meaning of the sentence.

Example 1 sounds like the caller is cleaning the apartment of the
narrator, because the subject hasn't changed from the beginning of
the sentence.
Example 3 leaves the friend in question: whose friend is he talking
about?
In Example 2 you have to have an article of some kind — if not
my then the, at the very least.

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: Re: Omitting pronouns and possessive adjectives in fiction When is OK to omitting pronouns and possessive adjectives in fiction? Examples: She called me that weekend while I was cleaning my apartment.

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: In narration, stay in one tense. "She had green eyes" is fine, because your entire story is in the past tense — the "present-past," if that makes sense. If she had green eyes as a

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: Consequences. A strikes B. Even if B provoked A, A still gets arrested, processed, tried, convicted, and serves time. A gets grief from family and friends. A feels mixed anger, resentment,

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