: Re: Formatting for fading between a radio broadcast and the protagonist Is it Ok to fade out the commentatorâ€™s voice before heâ€™s finished his broadcastâ€¦? Iâ€™m trying to illustrate to the readers

Here's my shot at this since the other one was a script and maybe you're looking for an example of prose which is going to be different.
Also, as Chekhov said, (paraphrase) "if you show something in the first scene it better be important later." en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Chekhov%27s_gun
If you have the radio interrupting then it should be significant to the story.

"I don't want to be late today," Jack said and turned on the radio.
"Can't be late today."

The accelaration of the Mitsubishi pushed Richard back into the passenger seat.
"Whoa, fella. I'd like to get there alive."

Mick Jagger's voice screamed through the car as an old Stones song
blared through the speakers.

Richard grasped the volume knob and turned it down. "I wouldn't mind
being able to hear when I get there either. What's with you this
morning, man?"

"I got this thing at work, okay? I'm trying to get myself in the right
mood," Jack said and cranked the music back up.

"I didn't know dead and deaf was a mood," Richard said. "Turn that
thing --"

A high pitched beep came through the speakers and cut Richard off.

"This is a broadcast from the emergency alert system," came the voice
from the radio. Jack turned it down and frowned. "Just as I was
getting into it."

"Wait a second," Richard said and reached for the volume. "What are
they saying? It sounded like it might be important."

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