: Adding to @Philipp 's answer: Know your plot and the consequences: If you describe the scene from POV of the victim, who provoked the action, you need a reason why she provoked it. If

Adding to @Philipp 's answer:

Know your plot and the consequences:

If you describe the scene from POV of the victim, who provoked the action, you need a reason why she provoked it. If the reader thinks she did it for no or void reason, the reader might agree with the aggressor. Is the victim suppressed by the aggressor? Why does she stand up to him now, if not earlier?
Don't have the aggressor show remorse. Yes, that's somewhat contrary to what Philipp's answer says. If you do, readers might sympathize with him instead of the victim. Let him make up stupid excuses, one after another until he gets aggressive again, because he notices the excuses don't do any good. Then you might have him confess, he doesn't believe his own excuses. That's enough to show he's feeling remorse without getting undue sympathy. If you let him break down and vow he won't do it again, that's quite stereotypical. If so, he has to secretly (not to the victim; he's tricking her) confess that he's not sure, if he can hold true to the vow. Otherwise, again he'll get undue sympathy. Reveal that he's indeed unable to control himself.

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