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I have read that a lot of passive voice deadens the story to 2 dimensional even if you are just trying to show something that takes time when you use the passive voice.
I quite often use passive voice.
A few examples from the Rubiks World novel I am working on are:
The 17x17 was most likely to be electrocuted.
Unfortunately, the 17x17 was electrocuted.(This and the sentence above both refer to the thunderstorm that happened on the very first day before they even built shelter)
While the 15x15 was pregnant, many new things were done.
Now most of my passive voice sentences have "was" in them.
An example though of one without was is:
He could be attacked without dying.(this is referring to the collection of big cats for meat, bone, and domestication(mainly cheetahs for domestication and bigger cats for meat and bone)).
In case you are wondering why I have numbers as characters, these numbers are representing the rubiks cubes and the rubiks cubes are the characters.
So should I completely eliminate passive voice from this novel I am working on or do some sentences need to be in passive voice(like the ones referring to the thunderstorm)?
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Completely eliminate? No.
In general, prefer active voice unless you have a specific reason to use passive.
Some reasons to use passive voice:
You don't know who did the action. I was carjacked on February 19, 1999. (True story.)
You wish to hide or deemphasize responsibility the action.
The person who did it is not important to the sentence at hand.
You wish to focus the reader on the effects of the action. After Hiroshima was bombed in August, 1945...
Passive voice creates a better rhythm or pace for your sentence. (Be careful with this one. Often a better solution is to recast the sentence or the context in which it appears.)
"X was most likely to be electrocuted" doesn't have an actor, so that's fine as is.
But if you have "many new things were done," tell us by whom, and what they did.
While the 15x15 was pregnant, the three-bys were busy building houses, the 9x9s dug latrines, and the lone Whip-It sat in the makeshift cage, wondering when his sentence would be carried out.
I'd say make the effort to remove passive voice whenever you can, and add detail, action, and movement in those spots.
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