: Re: Is it strange to describe the narrator's facial expressions in a first-person narrative? Examples: â€œReally?â€ I said, widening my eyes. "What?" My eyes lifted and I raised my brows

Although the narrator can't see his own face, he'd still feel his face moving, so I don't think that's the reason it feels strange. It sounds strange to me because the actions sound intentional. Facial expressions are generally involuntary. I don't raise my eyebrows in surprise -- they rather do it of their own accord. Your writing could reflect this:

"Really?" I gasped, eyes wide.
"What?" My eyebrows flew up in amazement.

Your second examples also make sense, because we have access to the narrator's emotional state in first person POV.

"Really?" I was shocked.
"What?" I couldn't believe what I was hearing.

It depends on what kind of effect you want.

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