: Re: Relative clause or a new sentence. Which is better in an introductory paragraph? I wrote In our approach, we rely mainly on the page's content to detect a data region, which in our definition

@Lengel543

Vote Up Vote Down

I don't think the trouble lies in either choice, since neither is inherently better than the other (though some could argue that the two-sentences version has more clarity). Rather, you may want to be begin with a simple context-setting sentence. Since this is a technical document, consider first mentioning that there are several ways to approach data regions, and then direct the reader's attention to what your approach is and why it has been chosen. Your argument would essentially move as follows: a) acknowledge the options, b) define/demonstrate the chosen method, and c) argue for its effectiveness.

One other stylistic note: beginning with "In our approach..." immediately puts the emphasis on the agent of the action, rather than on the method chosen. The reader may be more concerned with the details than with the doers.

(0)

Login to post a comment!