: Re: How do I bring my readers closer to my characters when using the third person? I've chosen to write my story in the third person due to the scope of it, but by doing so I have made it

@Radia543

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I like to use a lot of dialogue. It draws the reader in.

Narrative:

Joel didn't like riding the school bus. He was the last one on in the morning, and the seats were always filled. Because he wasn't one of the popular kids, no one made an effort to make room for him. Invariably, the bus driver would yell for him to sit down and the other kids would laugh. Occasionally, Megan would scoot over to make space, but Joel was usually too shy to ask.

Dialogue:

Joel looked at the boy in the third seat and asked, "Can I sit here?"

"In your dreams, twerp." Everyone within listening distance laughed. Typical.

Two seats later, it was "Try using deodorant. Don't your parents love you?"

After a few more inquiries, the bus driver yelled, "It's like this every day, kid! Now find a seat; we're running late!"

Finally, blessedly, he reached Megan, his eyes pleading. She moved her backpack and iPad and patted the seat next to her. "It's OK, Joel. You can sit here."

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