: Re: Which of the two cases of writing Flashback Stories is better? I am currently working on a story which is based on a flashback event of life. I want the past scene to appear as a current

@Turnbaugh521

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I feel both are confusing in terms of tense and of content.

1) Is it midnight in real time?

2) Is it morning in the dream, in past tense reality, or both?

3) Did you just awaken from the dream, or are you obsessing about the past?

4) Speaking of which, did the laughing students happen in the real world?

I turned my head. This time the clock read 12:05; it must have been another dream. They seem to be getting worse--the dreams, I mean. All right, so I guess lots of kids dream about being naked at school, but I doubt they feel my shame. The laughter comes from everywhere, and the screams stay with me--even to this very second. No way can I fall back asleep before dawn.

Or you can take your reader inside the dream.

"Charles, what do you think you're doing?" Mrs. Hutchinson asked incredulously. What started as smiles and smirks from the classmates around me, quickly cascaded into gesturing and full-on belly laughs.

"N, N, nothing, Mrs. Hutchinson," I lamely replied. She didn't seem impressed with my answer.

Suzie came up to me and yelled, "Haven't you heard of Erin's Law! They teach us about this you know! This is abuse!" She turned to Jennifer, who just couldn't even remotely keep it together, and added, "It's not funny!"

And that's what I woke up to at midnight.

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