: Re: How do you write 2 or more characters saying almost the same thing in unison When 2 or more characters speak in unison you can generally do something like this "awwwww, she's so cute!"

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1. Generalise

I ignored their spluttered protests

This works fine when it doesn't really matter what they're saying.

2. Share a dialogue line

"I said, Do you get me?"

"Sir, yes, sir!" they shouted in unison.

3. If the meaning of each is necessary, call it out.*

Use separate dialogue lines, but indicate in the narration that they spoke at the same time.

"Are you two married?"

"Of course not!" I said.

"Yes, for ages!" Marie said at the same time. A puzzled frown creased the big man's brow.

4. Try to avoid this construction

Really, as others have said, this is a spoken word trope. It rarely or never happens in real life, so there's no need to try to pull it into written dialogue either.

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