: Re: Which version of these three lines is more likely to attract the interest of the reader ? (character's viewpoint vs omnicient narrator) The first one is a suggestion I got from my previous

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Definitely, I like the first one.

I have no problem with omniscient narrator viewpoint but the second example looks a little bit jerky. (Maybe, the narrator is mentally ill or just loaded with something. I do not know the context.)

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