: Re: Can this sentence have the same detail and yet be simple to comprehend? While inside the weatherbeaten maternity hut lit by a single candle, out of the dark shadow of its mother's womb,

@Candy753

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If the word "conceived" is important later on in the story, try:

"...unusual child ever conceived in the village was born, immediately crumbled into bones in the midwife's hands. Horrified, the midwife tried an ancient spell by assembling the pices of the the infant together ..."

Something supernatural happened to the child, so the midwife, in many cultures are said to be able to do magic, so add that to the story. Now you can use the conception and the midwife's failed attempt as something evil that needs to be dealt with.

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