: The three key points for me are: "increasing green movement" doesn't make sense to me. It sounds like "green" is moving around more. Also, it's not clear what exactly they're responsible for.

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The three key points for me are:

"increasing green movement" doesn't make sense to me. It sounds like "green" is moving around more. Also, it's not clear what exactly they're responsible for.
Split the long sentence up into two or more sentences.
The subsidy has made it cheaper and encourages adoption, but the penalty (tax) affects heavy polluters, so make that distinction clearer.

A possible suggestion:

The growth of the green movement has
meant the introduction of a number of
measures to encourage household
investment in solar power. In
particular, subsidies for energy
produced by solar panels installed on
households have made it more
affordable, and the possibility of a
carbon tax means that heavy polluters
may have little choice but to cover
their buildings in cheap organic solar
power technology.

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