: Re: requesting a review/critique of an outro narrative Here's an outro narrative I wrote for our movie we're working on and I was wondering whether someone could provide a critique. Anything what

It doesn't sound hopeful to me. Also, is there any reason why this has to be so universal and not more personal? It comes across as kind of preachy. Introspective might be both more powerful and moving.

The first sentence could benefit by the rule of threes. List three things, not six.

I find this statement confusing:
"although according to the fundamental law of the universe, there doesnâ€™t appear to be any reason why free will should really exist."

What's the fundamental law of the universe?

I'd delete this part of the sentence entirely, it accomplishes nothing:
"Whether God exists or not, I donâ€™t know, but"

Finally, punch up the last sentence. If it needs to be hopeful, maybe make it a resolution, not just a realization.

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