: Re: How to avoid repetitive sentences? (Describing actions, he/she) I was just wondering if anybody had some tips on how to avoid repetitively describing characters' actions in the same way? Here

You have a couple easy options.

You can simply prune some out. If the dialog conveys the action then it's redundant and you should prune one or the other out anyway (current trend is more dialog, less narration).

You can change the structure. Instead of pronoun-action in every instance, you can mix it up.

Example:

Jill threw the ball, saying "Catch it! Catch the ball!"
Jack missed the ball, and said "Rats! Let's try again!" He snatched the ball from the ground and threw it to Jill.
She caught it, and said "See? This is a fun game."

Can be:

Jill threw the ball, saying "Catch it! Catch the ball!"
Missing her throw, Jack said "Rats! Let's try again!" and returned it to her.
She caught it, and said "See? This is a fun game."

I pruned one and changed the structure on another.

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