: Re: How can I make the fight between 3 big cat moms believable? I am rewriting my story about big cat friendship for the greater good. I have taken into consideration the fact that friendships

@Bryan361

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So let the injured lioness go after the cubs and the nomadic lioness. The wounds which she received from the fight with the other two moms might not be immediately fatal, but they could start her on a slow path to death.
Have her emerge from the fight with a long gash on her flank, curving down into her underbelly. Maybe the panther got in a lucky shot before dying. Have her lick at the wound but have it keep bleeding. As she pursues her child, make repeated note of the blood trail she is leaving behind her. Describe how she is getting weary but let her rage keep her on her feet, ever onward pursuing the cubs.

Meanwhile, milk the scene for tension among the cubs and the nomad. Use the young lion cub's fear of what its mom is going to do to its new friends to overcome its natural loyalty and love for its mom. Have the supportive presence of the nomad help as the cub is struggling with mixed loyalties. Meanwhile, keep all of them running as quickly as possible away from the pursuing danger.

Then, as the cubs are finally cornered and the nomad prepares to lay down its life in defense of the young, have the mother lion finally succumb to her wounds. Have her collapse and die, perhaps after sharing some last thoughts with her child. Make it tearful and tragic. Make your readers cry.

If you do that, your readers may be too busy dealing with their own grief to notice that a couple of significantly outclassed mother cats just took out a lion.

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