: Re: Help with my story - elements of a scene Iâ€™m writing a story where a vampire pulls a girl into a room so he can feed off her without anyone knowing. What are the things I should consider

Consider first the point of view of narration - is this a third person narrator, looking down on the character or characters from above? Or are things told from the perspective of the MC?

In a situation like this I'm presuming the girl would be afraid, and things would happen very fast for her, so I would consider those emotions when laying out your sentences. Short, choppy sentences and limited dialog tags are often used in action scenes so as not to drag the pace.

Consider what sensory details the characters would feel (again, depending on the POV of narration) and choose some striking ones to include in your description. Consider light and shadow in the room(s) and senses other than sight for your description too - i.e. smell of clothing, lactic acid burn in the muscles from exertion, sense of balance, etc.

It might be helpful to choreograph the scene before writing it out in paragraph form. Make decisions on the sequence of movements of her being pulled into the room and trying to escape and how long the actions will take. Overall the description of something like this is very subjective and will depend on your writing style and the context of the story.

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