: How should I phrase this sentence better? I am new at writing and it frustrates me to no end that I cannot describe a scene properly or that I cannot convey my thoughts efficiently to my

I am new at writing and it frustrates me to no end that I cannot describe a scene properly or that I cannot convey my thoughts efficiently to my fingers.

I have been goven advice that its just better to write a shitty sentence first and just come back to it later to improve it - and so i did just that. But for some reason, I am still sitting here for over 20 minutes knowing my sentence is shit but not knowing how to iprove it. Can anyone give me some help?

The sentence:

â€œI leaned back slightly, my emotions clouded in surprise, relief and guilt. I closed my eyes and took a deep breath, trying to compose myself.â€

What I want to convey here is the character feeling those 3 emotions all at once then trying to compose himself. â€œMy emotions clouded in...â€ just feels so wrong. I dont know how to replace it.

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