: Re: Mixing prose with character dialogue rhymes - childrens book I've written my first children's picture book manuscript and it uses a mix of prose for the narration and rhyme for the character's

It's perfectly acceptable and there are published children's books that mix rhyme and prose.

However, the switch between prose and rhyme can be jarring if you don't mentally prepare the reader for the switch by formatting the work in a way that readies them for what's to come.

Your dialogue example doesn't rhyme (I'm a bit confused by that) so forgive me for editing your work, but I wanted to illustrate the point and show what I mean by mentally preparing the reader:

If the smallest dot landed on her tiny shoes, she became grumpy and mad.

â€œIt's terrible!â€ she cried.
â€œMy shoes are dirty
Their sparkle has died!

I won't wear THESE
Take them away
And buy new ones PLEASE!â€

So, by using normal text for the prose and italicised text for the speech, the reader is mentally prepared for a switch. And by formatting the speech in stanzas, they expect it to rhyme.

After only a page or two, the reader will switch naturally without thinking as soon as they see a change in formatting.

Good luck!

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