: How to describe something, that would normally be shown by facial expressions? When I think of a scene, I often think of little hints or gestures, to express certain things or thought processes.

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There are plenty of ways to do it, and that's called "style", the way the writer transmits the ideas, feelings and actions is "their style" , you can be subtle, you can be obvious, you can make things fall into ambiguity. you can do all of them when you want.

Do you want the reader to interpret it? just describe the motion without interpretation

you want the reader to understand the character? you can just omit the description and go directly to the interpretation

you want to make it really important? add small details, stop focusing on the main part, and focus on the other things like :

was she doing something with her hands?
did he rolled his ring around his finger?
did he touched his chest or check while he said it?

but remember there has to be a reason for everything you are adding, and that has to bring something to the story. because the reader is going to wonder "why is that important?" until you unveil the mystery behind those small details.

i would say "Write more" but only something that's relevant.

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One mistake early writers make, is writing to directly influence the reader. The minute I say this, the retort is Isn't that the whole point?

Yes, but influencing the reader is not the kind of thing you should do directly; you do that indirectly through your characters. So the point in this instance is, your character's interpretation of the facial expression, and how that makes them feel or think, is all that is important.

Your reader feels through your character. You do not need or want the narrator to describe the physicality of the facial expression to the point that the reader can understand that without any further help; that is boring and their understanding would be clinical, not visceral. There is no punch to understanding after analysis. Aha, wrinkled nose, curled lip, open mouth and gag reflex, lowered head and brow: Therefore Mary is disgusted.

All that description is trying to make the reader see or mimic the expression for themselves. But even scripts do not do that or control actor expressions. They just say things like "Mary shows extreme disgust, almost vomits but doesn't. The actor (and sometimes director), in the context of the story, interprets that instruction for the camera.

Instead in prose, you mix small details that are clues to expression with metaphor and simile and reactions and let the reader imagine the expressions. Our expressions are a reflection of our feelings; when we see them in film they cue those feelings. But vice versa holds: If the reader understands the feelings, they will see the expressions that for them, reflects that feeling. Focus on the reactions you can most easily describe from both the feeling and its expression. In broad terms we understand wince, frown, amusement, fear, etc.

An example, hopefully you have an impression of their expressions:

Ralph sniffs deeply and winces, he tells Mary, "Brace yourself."
He struggles with the tight lid and throws it back on its hinges, sucking a wave of odor from the bin. Rotting flesh. Mary thought she was ready, but the thick odor hits her hard, staggering her. She turns away gagging, straining to not vomit. Ralph flinches but instantly steels his expression, leaning to peer into the bin with narrowed eyes; breathing in tiny measured breaths through his mouth alone.
Mary returns to his side. He glances at her. she is pale. Contrite.
"No shame, buddy," Ralph said. "Don't hurl on the evidence."
She shook her head. "I'm good." She looked into the bin; her stomach lurched again but with willpower, she suppressed, forcing herself to be analytic. She surveyed the woman. No cuts, no bullet holes, no obviously broken bones. Fully clothed, forty, an outfit Mary thought would cost a week's pay, hair to match it. Two rings but unmarried, necklace, earrings. No other objects or weapons. No shoes. What does that mean?
Ralph said, "Tell me what you see."

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I have this same issue Minix, I find myself defaulting to overused descriptions because what I want to get across seems far too complex.

One thing that helped me was to watch LIE TO ME. It's a TV series about a specialist who aids the police by reading micro-expressions, tiny facial tics that betray what we're thinking, combined with speech patterns and actions. The show is based on clinical psychologist Dr. Paul Ekman, an expert lie detector for the Secret Service and DOD.

The character has to analyse NVC in very quick time, forcing him to describe actions succinctly, and it helped me find (less cliched) ways of doing the same.

As an example, a somewhat cliched way of showing a character is lying is to break eye contact, perhaps blush or sweat. But a practiced liar sometimes does the opposite, maintaining eye contact and being very forceful in their claims. They spell things out in full but use distancing language to detach themselves from guilt. I found things like this very interesting when describing character actions. And while I agree with Mark Baker that you should read as much as possible, I sometimes find it helps to see things at work.

I try to focus on just one tic and use that rather than overload the reader. Leave them to infer the rest.

Good luck!

Note: Edited for clarification.

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