: Re: How to construct quality long sentences? I want to construct long sentences, for fiction. I do use subordinate conjunctions and coordinate conjunctions, and I also understand different kind of

I have to say that you've opened my eyes by asking this question. I tend to write long sentences already, but I never knew that there were fancy words for how to do that, so thanks for gifting me with knowledge of subordinate conjunctions and coordinate conjunctions.

I personally found the following cheat sheets to be very useful for understanding how long sentences are constructed:

Subordinate Conjunctions (providing a transition between ideas in a sentence / reducing the importance of one clause so that a reader understands which of the two ideas is more important)
Coordinate Conjunctions (using and, but, for, nor, or, so, and yet to connect words, phrases, and clauses).

They both include clear explanations and some very good examples.

It strikes me that if you already know these things and you are still struggling with writing long sentences, then perhaps you need to look deeper into the reasons why you tend to write short sentences. Is it perhaps that your sentences are reflecting your thought processes? Alternatively, is it possible that you have been taught that short sentences in writing are a good thing and that, on some level, you are reluctant to break free from that early conditioning?

I notice that you use several short sentences in your question (this being the only sample of your writing that I have) and that it would have been possible for you to have joined them into longer sentences. Maybe you can spend a few minutes asking yourself why you chose to chop your question into short segments. I feel that you would benefit from exploring this aspect.

Perhaps this was not quite the answer that you were expecting, but often digging into the root cause of behaviour is more rewarding than trying to apply a new layer of knowledge.

Good luck with your writing.

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