: Re: How do I make it clear that someone is going through something, like Obito and not like someone pushed through something? There’s a car and it’s going through a fence and I say “the

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A couple solutions for you:

Change verb

Verbs characterize the action. Try one different from "going". "Phasing" would be my first choice.

The car phased through the fence

Detail

Make very clear to the reader what's going on. Instead of simply

The car went through the fence

say

The car went through the fence, not as a wrecking ball goes through a wall, but in the same way we go through mirrors in dreams

(The metaphors could use some work, but you get the gist of it)

Establish a precedent

If your reader knows what to expect, you can let them do the heavy lifting of creating the picture. I believe this is what JK does in the HP books. The first time Harry goes through the platform, she describes in detail what happens. After that she just says he got through. There's no need to describe it again. Harry also sees other people going through first, establishing precedents.

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