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You are piling up fantasy on fantasy, so your characters and story look artificial

You basically took some characters from 21st century Western liberal world and made their lifestyle and ideas mainstream in 23rd century. You start the story with world in some kind of conflict (end of devastating war) but you never explain why your main characters live in relative luxury. If you start the story with the war and genetic modification, it is a biggest gun on your wall (Checkov's gun). You also do not explain why people in 23st century still go to taverns, catch the fish with nets, use boats with ropes etc ... To put it simply, your characters are two rich kids from 21st century transplanted to 23st century. And then, instead of further explaining 23rd century, you magically transport them to 14th century and start their adventure there.

My suggestion would be throw out unnecessary baggage. Either you are writing story about 14th century or 23rd. In former case, drop the introduction and make kids from current era somehow go to 14th century. Such kids would feel familiar to your audience, and you would not need to explain their behavior, social norms etc ... This would be easier path for you, because most of your story already belongs to 14th century. In latter case, well ... you would need to start anew and explain 23rd century.

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: Writing about a topic which you don't have personal experience in I would like to make it very clear that I'm very young (just graduated to a teen) and only an amateur writer. I have recently

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