: Re: Transitioning between an Interrupted sleep and falling back into it again WITHOUT repeating material? I'm currently working on a fanfiction/ comic, and a more recent scene I've been working on

@Connie138

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Use the form of the comic to tell your story.

This is a comic. A good artist will be able to show the transition back into sleep without a single word. Direct your artist (if it's not you) to draw a panel showing the character extremely exhausted as the bird either leaves the frame or fades into the background. The next panel shows her sleeping (if her position is the same as it is when she plopped back down to the mattress that will indicate how tired she is; too tired to rearrange herself).

The description of seeing the bird is also one that doesn't need any words at all. Use at least a couple panels, maybe even 3-4 to show everything you want to show.

For example:

Panel 1: The orange trees
Panel 2: A form on the thin line.
Panel 3: A closeup of the bird showing it bathed in moonlight.
Panel 4: The character squinting.
Panel 5: The bird in the spotlight revealing itself to be an owl.
Panel 6: The exhausted character as the bird fades away.
Panel 7: The character deep asleep in the same position that she fell into.

Note: I did not flesh these out in to full artist's instructions. That's your job!

You can do this over 2 pages or squeeze it into 1, depending on how important it is and how much space you have to work with. Some panels will be bigger than others and they do not have to be neat or even, just rectangular. You can add panels or combine panels. It's your story.

Maybe the character will mutter something or maybe there will be sound effects from the character (or the bird or elsewhere) but otherwise, I'd do this with no words at all.

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