: Re: Should I change from past to present tense to state a fact that continues into the present and is unyielding? Within narration in past tense, should a statement of a universally true fact be

Elizabeth here. Your first contribution and my first too. Hope this helps.

You begin by describing a scene then in the middle a switch to explaining to the reader why and then back to describing. Tense shifts back and forth. The "is synchronous" is correct. Yes the rotation is synchronous. Yes, one side of the moon always faces the planet. The tense shift is understandable and easily fixed. The two sentences at issue don't belong in the paragraph.

Take the two sentences out of the paragraph and use them to start the next paragraph. Descriptive and then Expository writing. Tense would not be an issue.

Hope this helps.

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