: Interweave the 2 initial stories that happen simultaneously - short chapters, place 1 chapter 1, place 2 chapter 2, place 1 chapter 3, etc... Potentially have an event that winds through the

Interweave the 2 initial stories that happen simultaneously - short chapters, place 1 chapter 1, place 2 chapter 2, place 1 chapter 3, etc...

Potentially have an event that winds through the activities in both places - the arrival of a ship, an unusually frigid wind, etc. that is mentioned during the course of the activities in both places - this will allow the reader to sync.

You could even cut from one location to the other via character actions - drogans sword lashes out and upwards, parrying the attackers weapon in mid strike, pushing it out wide and to the side, steel wailing all the while... [while on planet B] vetta stands back as she pulls her blade out of her gasping opponents guts, unleashing a torrent of blood and what she assumes are severed portions of the man's vitals - then without conscious thought she swipes the blade smoothly across the man's back, wiping away most of the offal, and quickly reverses its direction so that it glides effortlessly into its scabbard. The men around her, senses heightened by the unexpected attack, notice the fluidity of her moves and mark her as someone to respect. "What the hell was that!", she exclaims. "I certainly wasn't expecting there to be this much resistance so soon!"

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