: Re: How to creep the reader out with what seems like a normal person? The person in question, though this is yet unknown, is not actually a person. Instead, they are some form of eldritch being

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Too much detail

Any time I wish to make the reader uncomfortable I start describing things or people with too much detail. Human beings are great for that because when we observe people we see them as a person. We are so used to humans that the pile of talking meat does not seem weird to us at all. Now on the other hand if we lets say see a robot, a 1960s robot with huge pistons and nothing human shaped it may very well come apart in our minds into mechanical parts.

So this is what you do, have the narrator see this person as a pile of meat instead of a person, because that is what they are.

How do you execute this? Start by reading your anatomy books. Humans have lots of parts and muscles and it's great time to mention them.

here is an example. Normal person

"I want to go the store," Bob said.

VS

Bob sucked air into his lungs filling the alveoli. He then opened
his mouth showing a pink tongue shining from saliva. The pushed air
through the taught chords pitching the sound into distinct noises. His
lips tightened and relaxed further adding modulation. A sound came out
audible to human hearing, "I want to go to the store"

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