: I like drɱ65 δ's advice for the first sentence. For the second, try: In my Financial Analysis and Control module I attained a strong First (72%) for a financial performance analysis

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I like drɱ65 δ's advice for the first sentence. For the second, try:

In my Financial Analysis and Control module I
attained a strong First (72%) for a financial performance analysis of
the Z Company.

This not only removes the which, but also leaves the sentence with a stronger main verb--attained instead of the wimpier included.

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