: Re: Is it bad to describe a character long after their introduction? I have a tendency to forget to describe character's appearance. But I always describe them, though often a little while after

@Rivera824

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I'd say the issue is that if you are in a character's viewpoint and they meet a new person, they will likely have some response to that new person straight away. That should be mentioned in the moment.

He smelled like old garlic and fish, and I took a step back.

or...

She wore a bowtie and suspenders. I wanted that sort of moxie, the self confidence to cross dress in some little way, say 'up yours' to anyone I happened to pass on the street.

or...

This kid--my god this kid looked completely hopped up on... something.
His eyes were glazed over and he smelled like he might have soiled
himself. i looked up at his mom, but she seemed just like any other soccer
mom.

^Those are the sorts of things that a character would notice, and they not think them later, at the end of the scene, but instead right away. I think some reaction (which provides description) should happen right away, and it should be the response from your viewpoint character that tells us more about her/him.

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