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: Re: Do we simplify descriptions when they sound weird? The woman said as she pulled a small coin out of a small wallet ... The woman said as she pulled a small coin out of a small box
Case 1: The opening of the wallet is irrelevant to the story
You have already established that the woman has a small wallet from where she pulls out small coins. You can skip all subsequent restatements of this fact.
Any further repetition of the action can be reduced to
The old woman pulled another small coin from her small wallet
or, if you want to stress that the action has already occurred in the past:
Again, the old woman pulled a small coin from her small wallet
or, if the small wallet is irrelevant to the story:
Once more, the old woman pulled out a small coin.
Case 2: The opening of the wallet is crucial to the story
In this case, you may want to further expand on the action and stress that it is being repeated.
Once more the old woman reached for the small wallet and pried it open with her wrinkled fingers. etc...
A side note: avoid repetitions
The repetition could be a copy-paste of the "old woman pulled out a..." sentence, as well as having "small ... small ..." in the same sentence. This stylistic device may be welcome in fairy tales, and some form of poetry, but it breaks the flow of text in other types of writing.
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