: Why this is difficult: dramatic conventions If a description of something is unique and also can't be observed incidentally by the reader, as with a character's highly unusual physical features,

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Why this is difficult: dramatic conventions

If a description of something is unique and also can't be observed incidentally by the reader, as with a character's highly unusual physical features, you can bet the reader will flag it as a notable detail. As soon as they encounter it again they will draw a connection, and they will quickly map all of the other hints and uncertainties onto that connection to see if their theory works. Those kinds of details work better in crafting a reveal or twist than in laying the trail of breadcrumbs because, as you noted, they're just too obvious.

The reason this is always a giveaway is because writing follows dramatic conventions, and readers are attuned to them and work consciously or subconsciously to identify them, especially when they are trying to resolve a mystery. To keep up the pacing and thrust of a story with suspense you can't have a bunch of irrelevant details gumming up the works, and so unnecessary information often gets chucked. Therefore if it is in the story, it must be relevant (see Chekhov's gun).

The weakness of using physical attributes as clues in writing

All of your tells are physical attributes, some of which are unambiguously unique. Therefore they are 1) too memorable, and 2) too difficult to shoehorn in as not-obviously-planted information.

I'm reminded of the books by Edward Rutherford in which we trace the history of a city through the eyes of certain characters and their family lines. He has to keep reinforcing the family connection by describing shared physical features, and it feels rather contrived because it doesn't fit naturally into the story. So you start to get multiple characters whose faces are described as "shaped like a spoon", and you know to expect it, and it becomes a weird sort of symbolism.

Some better approaches

Don't be too heavy-handed with any clues. Not every Mask must
exhibit all of the clues, and therefore they are better if they
aren't right there on his face.
On that note, it would be better to lose the permanent,
difficult-to-disguise, and utterly unique features. Having your
clues be more generic introduces a new element of uncertainty
because your readers have more possible interpretations for them.
Even if you want to keep some of them, don't keep all of them.
Multiple characters/Masks have venom burns but not necessarily in
the same arrangement? Perhaps they were all soldiers together in a
battle against an alien enemy species with venom. Multiple
characters have the same brand on their forehead? Maybe they're
members of a cult. But if they all have the same splatter pattern of
burn marks and also have a knife scar on the left side of their face
and the same weird eyes, and shake the ground when they walk, it's pretty clear that this is a unique
individual. You can easily lose the falcon eyes in transformation, even if the scars are important to the plot.
At the very least give Loki the means to hide those tell-tale
traits. If the scars are immutable as part of the plot, fine-- you
can give him beards, hats, balaclavas, whatever, and make them more
subtle. Have him wear contact lenses or sunglasses. Have him walk
deliberately and softly until a moment of high emotion or
distraction, when his heavy tread emerges.
Even better, use other details as clues, particularly those that
will fit naturally into the plot or the dialogue. Loki could have a
specific philosophy or certain turns of phrase that he favors, and
(if there is enough dialogue to dilute the effect) those could work
their way into the conversations of the Masks. (Again, not every
Mask every time.) He could react to a situation in a way that
betrays an earlier experience, such as jumping to the wrong
conclusion, panicking when he encounters venomous animals, etc.
You can also subvert the reader's clue-seeking strategy by hiding
the clues in plain sight, or disguising them as something unrelated. Don't make your Masks shadowy, mysterious
characters whose identity and purpose are unknown. Instead, describe
them fully, give them a benign surface agenda, make them seem
unthreatening and well-meaning. That this blind monk with the warm
smile happens to wear dark glasses doesn't mean anything, right?

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