: Re: Where to draw the line between bloody and purely repulsive? Violence and gore are an integral part of my story. However, I can usually keep the focus on the emotions, and the reactions, rather

@Ravi5107385

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I think that the description of gore is fine - if presented properly. Tips:

Show the villains enjoyment, rather than the actual gore. Maybe try to say something like "The floor, red and slippery, was covered in pieces of flesh. In the centre sat Best Dad, revelling in the glorious display of colours he had created..."
(Like @ChrisSunami 's answer)Show the effect of the actions on the people surrounding him. For example, saying that "Whilst Best Daddy sat, his heartbeat resonating in his chest, he watched the squirming, and silent screaming of his next victims - a young mother of three and her kids..."
Focus on the villain's motivation. I would approach this by examining the villains motive - Best Dadddy likes killing because it makes the world an emptier place, freeing him from the shackles of responsibility. Couching the description within motivations can create a deeper villain, and allow you to create a moving scene. "I stared at the art before me - deep scarlet paint, mixing on the damp chair, creating a pool of blood, in which floats the head of the most recent plaything. "So you watch me after death do you" I snarled, "But now you are gone, I am free - I don't need to look after anyone like you again."

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