: Re: Does this writing create emotion in the reader? The thing I hear most often about my writing is, "It's too dry." I'm sure this happens to other people too. I'm working on eliciting

Try putting the entire thing in present tense, unfolding in real time. That tends to elicit emotion better than a chronolog.

You start with present tense: "I wake up screaming," but then dropped the ball -- why? To keep us on the edge of our seats, we need to think something is about to happen, not that it has already happened.

You also slip into passive voice at the end: "has created," "is made from," etc. Make the reader an actor, not an observer! Battling passive voice is challenging, but rewarding.

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