: Re: Is it really necessary to add things like "I thought, I wondered, etc," in first-person narrative? Example: The whole thing sounded a bit strange. How had she gotten my number? I wondered.

@Cody1607638

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I have often encountered the writing advice, "Show, don't tell." In line with Brett Cassette's answer, I would even consider revising the first sentence. For example (probably lame, because I don't know what came before in the scene):

I sat frowning at the phone after erasing the message.
How had someone named Maria gotten my number? Mom?

Rather than telling how the narrator felt about the call, provide an image that allows the reader to experience those feelings more directly.

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