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I'm not clear on the timing. Is this first person narrative in the moment, or the narrator recalling the event after the fact? If it is the former, it is overwritten by about 100 to 1, since someone that exhausted shouldn't be able to think such detailed imagery. If it is the latter, the present tense should be changed to past tense.

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: A classic one can be for example the Spanish "Lazarillo de Tormes", I am not really sure if it is adapted, but it is really important in my country: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lazarillo_de_Tormes

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: Writing a newspaper article summary First of all, I'd like to apologize in advance for my horrible English, but it's not my primary language and I still can't help but make some blunders. I

: Getting details of a past century right I have been gathering ideas for a novel. The basic idea is in place; the story combines two different eras but the same place. How do I get the little

: In script writing, how to denote laughter in unison I'm writing a TV spec script for fun, and was just wondering how I would denote laughter in unison from a bunch of sailors on a boat.

: A classic one can be for example the Spanish "Lazarillo de Tormes", I am not really sure if it is adapted, but it is really important in my country: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lazarillo_de_Tormes

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