: Re: How do I add more imagery to this short paragraph? I am writing an essay for tenth grade, and I have to write a small story in one paragraph. With a lot of imagery (to get my teacher excited).

@Murray831

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I see some opportunities to add sensory details:

What do you see or hear that tells you the camp is really old?
How did the slides differ from each other? The swings?
How many people in the camp group playing on the playground? What were the others doing? What sounds did they make? What did you see?
How were you swinging? Gently? Risky high swings? Twisting? How did it feel? What did you see?
What were you holding onto just before you slipped? What did you feel through your hand?
What did slipping feel like to your hand?
What did you feel when grandma hugged you? How did she hug you? Tightly? Gently? In a death grip? How did she smell? How did she sound?

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