: Re: What to do when you get stuck trying to connect sentences? At first I blamed coffee (I thought caffeine had a chemical which blocked "editing" skills). But then I realized it happens to me

Don't connect them. That's it.
Really, you are rewriting here. The most important part of rewriting is to compare the rewrite with the original version. If you have any doubt that the rewrite is improvement, don't change anything. And I guess you already tried some rewrites.
If you want to change something, you can also consider using punctuation marks instead of words:

This lack of fervor didn't bother Eri, though; not all couples needed to be crazy in the bedroom.
This lack of fervor didn't bother Eri, though--not all couples needed to be crazy in the bedroom.

But that's just fine also:

This lack of fervor didn't bother Eri, though. Not all couples needed to be crazy in the bedroom.

In the second case you just can replace "kind" with "sex":

Not all couples needed to be crazy in the bedroom. The sex she had with Takeshi was just fine.

Don't make it overly complicated. If in doubt, trust your creative voice. That's the one which wrote the first version.

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