: Re: Am I adding too many unnecessary "actions/descriptions"? I common critique I receive is that I add too many unnecessary actions/descriptions to a scene. Most of the time I just add them to make

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I just have one thing to add to the above. I'd omit this line: "A typical commuting scene." Why? Because you just described 'a typical commuting scene' immediately preceding it: "...trains come and go, people getting on and off." And there it's in the form of action, which is good. In my opinion, this makes the 'typcial' fragment superfluous.

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