: Is it bad to have sentences that are too long? The sentence in question is: As players move around the board, they buy, rent and sell properties from and to each other with each player

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Sentences always are too long when they're wordy. Lauren did a nice job of tightening the sentence and makes an excellent point about zero sum. Depending on the context, the sentence might be tighten even further:

"As players move around the board, they buy, rent and sell properties from and to each other, trying to maximize their wealth."

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Too long.

Let's add some commas and trim the redundancies:

As players move around the board, they buy, rent, and sell properties from and to each other, with each player trying to maximize his or her own wealth.

Not only does "zero-sum" actually mean "everyone must lose in order for one player to win," pretty much all board games intended for players out of preschool are zero-sum. It's kind of a given that you have one winner and everyone else loses.

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