: Re: Where should I put a minor action within a piece of dialogue? Which is more appropriate: The air carried a bitter chill, but was clear and unpolluted. â€œOh wow,â€ I said. â€œI

I like the first one.

On the other hand there is no real better here other than personal preference and consistency of style. I still line the first one, it's more optimistic.

: Re: Where should I put a minor action within a piece of dialogue? Which is more appropriate: The air carried a bitter chill, but was clear and unpolluted. â€œOh wow,â€ I said. â€œI

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: Re: Where should I put a minor action within a piece of dialogue? Which is more appropriate: The air carried a bitter chill, but was clear and unpolluted. â€œOh wow,â€ I said. â€œI

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: Re: Where should I put a minor action within a piece of dialogue? Which is more appropriate: The air carried a bitter chill, but was clear and unpolluted. â€œOh wow,â€ I said. â€œI