: Re: Is the following extended metaphor/group of metaphors too overwhelming? I bought a box of sushi, and sat at the round table beside me. Opening the plastic container made me feel as

@Debbie451

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Oy. Chop, chop, chop. You establish the metaphor of the treasure chest, so you can just declare that A=B without the transitions.

The plastic container was a treasure chest of food. I peeked inside to admire its content. Under the store's lamp, the tiny eggs glistened like pearls. The red, white, and orange fish slices were edible jewels, the omelet smooth and shiny as a gold bar. I couldn't stand another second, so I picked up my chopsticks and got started.

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