: Re: Does this entice the reader to continue? This is the beginning of my science fiction book that I am currently writing. I tried to be more specific, but without giving away the full idea. I

I think you're in the right direction. However, the first two sentences are a little bit too general. Basically, what they are saying is this: today is an especial day for pretty much everyone.

A good hooking sentence should provide some information and rise questions at the same time.

Consider this:

Today was the day. Most teenagers were afraid; they had the fear of
emerging.

So, in this case, the reader will ask himself/herself: Why were the teenagers afraid? Why emerging is scary?

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