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Topic : Re: How would I improve the language and structure of this farewell email? I will shortly be moving to another a role within the same organisation and was wondering if you could advise on how - selfpublishingguru.com

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It's a bit gushing but I guess that's your style. It looks good -- you don't really need help with writing. Except

Capitalize "Compliance" if it's a department name.
Replace "talented people like yourself," with "talented people," -- they know you're addressing them.
Replace "I only hope that I find in my new role a fraction of the encouragement" with "I hope that I find in my new role the encouragement" -- toning it down a notch.


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