: Re: Third-person objective in action scene I'm telling a story in third-person objective, the first part being basically an objective description of events around a certain character. I got to a

@Sherry594

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It should be pretty simple to write her decisions if they are truly brief. For example:

Vala whirled to face her attacker, checking him over for potential weaknesses. She noted a gap in his armor just above his waist. Gotcha! she thought. A quick jab with her dagger tore a scream from his throat.

Emotions and thinking should be just as easy:

Jane arrived home to find her computer beeping, announcing the arrival of an urgent message. She mused that she was almost busier on the weekends than when she was on call during the week.

or:

Facing the enormous ogre at last, Sular felt a tiny spark of anger growing in his chest. What gave this beast the right to come barging in at this time of night?

Obviously the content of these examples is nil (I came up with all three of them just now), but I hope I've given you ideas for introducing a character's thinking into a third-person narrative.

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